Before: Grey light came in through a window high in the wall. The feeble light had a depressing quality, without life and unnatural. The object on which the light fell was not at all what Alde had anticipated. He could not have dreamed it even in a nightmare.
After: The grey, moldering light crept in at a window high in the wall through which Alde could see the stars. Their light passing through the small window became polluted and unnatural, descending, deteriorating in squalid, ambiguous pallor. The object on which the light fell was not at all what Alde had anticipated. The sight entered the eye like a blind maggot working its way toward the brain to arrive in an ecstacy of horror. He could not have dreamed it in a nightmare.